Julie+Descriptive+Writing

Descriptive Writing Common Assessment English 2B Julie Kim (Dah Yoon Kim)   Disappointment Park   “Mom, Dad! Look at these! That ‘Ferris wheel’ is the one that I saw on the television show! That ride is the one that my friends told me! There’s also my favorite doll over there in the store! Oh, there’s also my favorite snack! What shall I do first? It’s just like... the heaven!” I couldn’t control my mind for few minutes, astonished by a wonderful place I had ever seen and wandering what to do first. Then, a balloon that had a picture of my favorite cartoon attracted me. “Mom, Dad? Look at that balloon! It has my favorite character on it! Please buy me one, please!” I badgered them persistently and it worked at last. As soon as I got the balloon that I wanted in my hands, I clapped accidentally because of the sudden excitement, which made my balloon to fly into the air. “Balloon! Come back! My… my balloon!” The balloon didn’t hear me. It flew up to the sky quickly and soon, it disappeared. “It’s gone!” I started to wail like a baby. My mom tried to calm me down. “Julie, it’s alright. Mom will buy you another one. Oh, look at that!” She pointed at the biggest balloon that I had ever seen before; it was so huge that I almost screamed at it. I stopped crying immediately and looked at the ride. It was the hot-air balloon shaped ride. I immediately clamored to my mom and dad that I wanted to ride on that amazing balloon. My mom bought me a cotton candy nearby and led me to wait until my brother comes back from the red and black spotted, ladybug shaped bathroom. However, I didn’t listen to her. I wanted to ride on it straight away and so I couldn’t control my mind at that moment; I just couldn’t wait until the line gets as long as a mile. I ran through all the people who were walking around the roads and lined up quickly like a lightening. My mom and dad lost me. I saw them trying to find me but I didn’t go back even though they looked so worried. I just didn’t want to. The only thing that I wanted to do at that moment was to get on the fantastic balloon which seems like the one that could appear in a fairy tales and feel the wind up in the high sky. Luckily, I did not have to wait so I immediately went on the huge air balloon. <span style="font-family: "Arial Rounded MT Bold"; font-size: 10.0pt; line-height: 150%; mso-bidi-font-family: Arial; mso-bidi-font-size: 13.0pt;">Just then, a Chinese woman came by holding her son in one hand. “Do you have anyone to ride with?” she asked me politely in Chinese. <span style="font-family: "Arial Rounded MT Bold"; font-size: 10.0pt; line-height: 150%; mso-bidi-font-family: Arial; mso-bidi-font-size: 13.0pt;">“No.” I answered her straight away in my f luent Chinese and waited until the balloon started to move. <span style="font-family: "Arial Rounded MT Bold"; font-size: 10.0pt; line-height: 150%; mso-bidi-font-family: Arial; mso-bidi-font-size: 13.0pt;">“Then will you ride with my son? He is also riding by himself, but I think it would be better if you could ride with him.” I stared at that boy and he looked so naughty. I definitely didn’t want to ride on the amazing ride with a person who I don’t know. “No. I don’t want to.” I said rudely. <span style="font-family: "Arial Rounded MT Bold"; font-size: 10.0pt; line-height: 150%; mso-bidi-font-family: Arial; mso-bidi-font-size: 13.0pt;">So I rode by myself. At first I was so excited that I am starting to go apart from the ground. The pink cotton candy, which I was eating, melted sweetly in my mouth made me to feel so excited. As I went up higher, the buildings and people started to shrink in their size and they became as little as ants when I went up in the superlative part that the ride could go. I felt like that I am supervising the whole amusement park. Then the cold and sharp wind blew strongly and my hat flew in to the air like a bird. I looked down to the ground and saw my hat dropping and felt dizzy by the height. Then suddenly, the balloon ride started to make a sound like a car running out of fuel. <span style="font-family: "Arial Rounded MT Bold"; font-size: 10.0pt; line-height: 150%; mso-bidi-font-family: Arial; mso-bidi-font-size: 13.0pt;">"Pssss.." <span style="font-family: "Arial Rounded MT Bold"; font-size: 10.0pt; line-height: 150%; mso-bidi-font-family: Arial; mso-bidi-font-size: 13.0pt;">Then I noticed that the ride had stopped. I caught the cold metal handle that was placed beside me and held it as hard as I could. I felt so scared and frightened because I just noticed that I have acrophobia. My legs and body shook violently, that seemed like there was an earthquake as I tried to look down to the ground. I felt alone there! I stopped eating the cotton candy because it had a terrible taste, as bitter as the herb medicine that I usually ate when I was sick. I started to cry. I couldn’t hear anything except for the fearful sound of the wind. I needed to shout for help but I had no bravery to look down. I dropped the cotton candy and started to wail and scream. Droplets of tears started flowing out of eyes like a waterfall and through to my cheeks as I shouted. Tears covered my sight. I could only see the blurry sky. It felt like… I was in Hell alone, who got apart from the Heaven. <span style="font-family: "Arial Rounded MT Bold"; font-size: 10.0pt; line-height: 150%; mso-bidi-font-family: Arial; mso-bidi-font-size: 13.0pt;">Time went through so slowly as if someone stopped the time. Then suddenly, I heard a really small sound calling my name. I intuitively noticed that it was a shout made by my parents. I screamed back to let me down. But nothing happened. I was so scared by the fact that I was locked in the balloon ride and so tried to kick the door and go out. I was insane. <span style="font-family: "Arial Rounded MT Bold"; font-size: 10.0pt; line-height: 150%; mso-bidi-font-family: Arial; mso-bidi-font-size: 13.0pt;">Right at that moment, when I kicked the door continually and trying to open the door, the ride made a strange sound again. It finally started to move! I stopped kicking and cried out aloud with tears. It took about forty minutes for the ride to finish. When I stepped on to the ground and smelt the warm and fresh air there, I ran straight to my mom and dad and threw myself in their arms. <span style="font-family: "Arial Rounded MT Bold"; font-size: 10.0pt; line-height: 150%; mso-bidi-font-family: Arial; mso-bidi-font-size: 13.0pt;">“I’m so sorry; I shouldn’t have left you without permission! Sorry, I’m so sorry… I won't leave you ever again without permission!” I cried with gladness that I met them again. My parents hugged me for a while to calm my frightened mind down. <span style="font-family: "Arial Rounded MT Bold"; font-size: 10.0pt; line-height: 150%; mso-bidi-font-family: Arial; mso-bidi-font-size: 13.0pt;"> <span style="font-family: "Arial Rounded MT Bold"; font-size: 10.0pt; line-height: 150%; mso-bidi-font-family: Arial; mso-bidi-font-size: 13.0pt;">I can still remember that moment which was the most frightening instant for me in my whole life. That’s why now I only ride on the merry-go-round or bumper cars, which are places safely on the ground. <span style="font-family: "Arial Rounded MT Bold"; font-size: 10.0pt; line-height: 150%; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt;">