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Final Draft of the second Book Review:
Book Review One of the fiction books in the ‘House of Night’- series, Betrayed, is a highly addictive book, written by P.C Cast and Kristin Cast (her daughter). This is one of the best book series that I have ever read. Once you start reading it, you won’t be able to stop, no matter what. This book series is mainly about things that happened in a vampire school that is also known by Human. A human will get chosen to become a fledging, and will be sent to the vampire school called, the House of Night. It has been a month since Zoey Redbird was being chosen to become a vampire. She has lost her friends and people who she cared most about, except for her grandmother who has also known about the house of Night. Since the beginning of school in the House of Night, lots of weird things have happened and turned her world up side down. Her previous love, Heath, whom she had known since kindergarten, was imprinted with her since Zoey drank his blood. It was forbidden for vampires to drink real human blood. Zoey has been given special powers of all the five elements from Nyx, she was the goodness of the house of Night. Zoey can call on air, water, fire, earth and spirit. Each of her friends was given one of the five elements. Her best friend is Stevie Rae who is also Zoey’s roommate have been hanging out since Zoey arrived at the House of Night. They have the same cat; the cat chooses their owner and not gets chosen. Stevie died since she was not able to mature from a fledging to a real vampire. After the death of Stevie, teenagers were being killed, and all the suspects from the Human world of the crimes turned to the House of Night. Nefret, who was Zoey’s mentor, was hiding a dark secret behind her every smile at students, but no body knows except for Zoey and Aphrodite, used to be Zoey’s enemy and the formal leader of the Dark Daughters. P.C Cast and Kristin Cast corporate on writing the series including this book. PC Cast was inspired by what her agent had said about writing a series of a vampire finishing school. Kristin Cast attends the University of Tulsa, she goes to college since she likes education and attends lectures. She was a journalist and editor for her high school newspaper and magazine. She loves poetry too, and has won awards for poetry. Overall, I will recommend teenagers to read this book series. It is very addictive once you start reading it. I was unable to stop until I finished the whole book in just one day.

1st Draft of the second Book Review
Book Review

One of the fiction books in the ‘House of Night’- series, Betrayed, is a highly addictive book, written by P.C Cast and Kristin Cast (her daughter). This is one of the best book series that I have ever read. Once you start reading it, you won’t be able to stop, no matter what. This book series is mainly about things that happened in a vampire school that is also known by Human.

A human will get chosen to become a vampire, and will be sent to the vampire school called, the House of Night. It has been a month since Zoey Redbird was being chosen to become a vampire. She has lost her friends, family, people who she cared most about, except for her grandmother who has also known about the house of Night. Since the beginning of school, lots of weird things have happened and turned her world up side down. Her previous love was imprinted with her since Zoey drank his blood. It was forbidden for vampires to drink real human blood.

Zoey has been given special powers of all the five elements. She can call on air, water, fire, earth and spirit. Each of her friends was given one of the five elements. Her best friend is Stevie Rae; she is her roommate too. They have been hanging out since Zoey arrived at the House of Night. They have the same cat; the cat chooses their owner and not gets chosen.

Overall, I will recommend teenagers to read this book series. It is very addictive once you start reading it. I was unable to stop until I finished the whole book in just one day.

Annabelle Lin

Twilight Book Review
Mr. Nordmeyer ESOL Feb 15, 2010

“Twilight”, a fiction book, which is filled with fantasies and fairy tales written by Stephanie Meyer, it is the first book of the Twilight series. It is even made into movie since it is extremely popular among teenagers. Human falling in love with a vampire, which is an idea that nobody had ever thought of before. The story takes place in Forks, which is located in USA. I really enjoy reading this book and hope that you will like it too. Bella Swan is the main character in the story. She moved from Phoenix to Forks to live with her first father. (Her mother remarried). Edward Cullen is the guy who she falls in love with. He is a vampire. He has two older sisters and two older brothers, they are not related by blood but they live together since the father made all of them into vampires. Even though Edward knows that it is dangerous for Bella to be with him since she is a human and that her blood smells extremely different from all other humans, which smells sweeter than others human beings.

Bella and Edward go on an escape since there was another vampire called James and he wants to drink Bella’s blood since it smells good, James tricks Bella to come to her old ballet classroom alone by letting her listen to her mom’s voice on a phone saying that she is being kidnapped by him and if Bella doesn't come then her mother will die. The voice of her mother calling Bella is actually from a tape that was recorded when Bella was young. After Bella went all other Cullen family members got worried and went to the ballet place since Alice, Edward’s sister could see the future. James bit Bella just right before Edward arrived. The Cullen had to rip off James’s head and burn his body since vampires doesn't die easily like humans.

Meyer used lots of vocabularies from the SAT books and imagery, which we could see in our heads when we read it off from the book. I recommend the Twilight series to teenagers of both female and male since it is a love story and when it first came out it was being bought by lots of teenagers more than adults.

=Reflection=

In the speech I represented, it included various kinds of persuasive techniques. One of them was the Rule of Three which I used the same word for the beginning of the three sentences. I also used emotional words such as, broke millions of hearts, killed millions of innocents and wiped out millions of happiness. I also used lots of hard evidence to proved how many people until now had died in the earthquake, how many people are homeless, and how many houses are destroyed. At the end I used alliteration that I put donate RIGHT NOW! After watching my speech and listening to my speaking skills and pronunciation, I realized that when I talk fast and somehow nervously my words started to blur together and it wasn't as clear as I’m talking to a friend. I still need to work on my speech making skills since I often get too nervous (even though I don’t look so) that my voice shakes when speaking. Next time I should be clearer when I speak since I often get distracted when speaking in front of many people by every single noise. Overall I was quite happy about the result I got even though it was a tie but I still get to help Haiti.

Q2 Goals

 * Reading**: I want to learn more vocabulary words so I can understand easier when reading a complex novel.
 * Strategy**: I will accomplish this by studying the Red Hot Root Words book.
 * Reflection**: I have been studying the Red Hot Root Words and learning more words at the SAT academy therefore now I know more words than before.


 * Writing**: I want to use more complex sentences in my writing in the future.
 * Strategy**: I will accomplish this by going to Mr.Nordmeyer and Mrs.Edmund and ask them to check for mistakes or a better way to write my essay.
 * Reflection**: I had asked Mr.Nordmeyer for conference for my writing assignment during first semester and I will continue having conferences.


 * Speaking**: I want to speak in complete sentences when talking to friends and classmates.
 * Strategy**: I will accomplish this by reminding myself to talk in complete sentences before speaking to anyone.
 * Reflection**: I have tried to talk to them in complete sentence and I did it the first few weeks but soon I forgot about it...


 * Listening**: I want to concentrate when the teacher is speaking and be able to understand when the teacher is talking at a fast speed.
 * Strategy**: I will accomplish this by listening carefully and put everything that will make me divert attention away.
 * Reflection**: I have been doing okay in this goal but I often get distracted by sounds coming from everywhere made by students...

China ALive "Greatest Hits"
I couldn't go to China Alive since I was sick and was having fever on the first day before going to the airport. Therefore I stayed at home for one whole week. I was having fever the day that we are going on China ALive. On the first day of "their" five days of China ALive I stayed home ,after knowing that I wasn't able to go, thinking how should I spent the week. At first I was thinking about reading a book while lying in bed but instead I just slept until the second day, then I started reading The Knight World which is a fictional book about imaginary creatures, in the afternoon my fever got worsen, it was 39.8 degrees almost 40 degrees=(. On wednesday my fever was gone and I was feeling better but I caught a flu. In the evening Stephane's mother called my mother about Stephane having fever and altitude sickness. On thursday I was still having cold but not as bad as yesterday, and I finished the book I was reading and started on the next volume. Friday morning I woke up early since I had too much of sleep. In the evening Stephane, her mother, her aunt, my mother, my sister and I went out for dinner in a Japanese restaurant, their food were delicious and there were lots of people lining up.

This picture looks just like the sushi that we ate at the restaurant. http://paulbuckley14059.files.wordpress.com/2007/08/sushi.jpg

My Descriptive Writing assignment


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The Dangerous Moment
Annabelle Lin 2B Sep 16.2009 Descriptive Writing

It was on a clear sunny Wednesday. I had badminton class right after lunch; it was my favorite class during grade four. “Hey! We should hurry up; the gym is too far away from this building. We should run fast before badminton class starts.” Said Angel, my best friend during fourth grade. Angel, Wei, Sally, Tiffany and I were talking toward the gym that is about a hundred meters away from the lower school building. While we were running, an old lady came in front of us and smiled at us then she said something in a strange language that we have never heard of before but we didn't care. Then we started to talked and compare some teachers who we disliked with the teachers that we liked, but mostly we talked about classmates who we hated. While we were running an unexpected thing happened. Lily who was older than us and whom we disliked started to chase us for no reason. She was one of the bullies in our school. We began to speed up. I could see evil in her enormous rounded eyes. Suddenly she stuck her right foot out and tripped me. Since I was running near her, of course I fell. I thought I just hit the ground and got some bruises, but unfortunately, I hit right on the sharp edges of the rough stone stairs. I couldn't feel anything. There were a few seconds of complete darkness and silence that hurts my eyes and my ears. I saw people staring and some looked insane as if my blood were bursting out of my eye. I could feel no pain. Then I stood up dizzily and stared downwards. My shirt covered in blood. My shorts were covered in dust. My brand new white sneaker became bloody red color. Before the accident my shoes were pale white and clean but after the accident the color changed into a bloody red dusty color. Abruptly I started to see some stars and everything turned so bright that I couldn't see a thing. And something in my subconscious told me that I was dying. I lost my balance.

Suddenly I felt somebody holding my hand and was helping me to get up off the ground. The next thing I knew was that I was sitting in the school clinic with the nurse, who was trying to stop my head from bleeding. Then I saw my mom came rushing towards me when she saw my cut on my eyebrow she was shocked opening her mouth so wide and said, “ What happened? You..your..r...eye…ey..e….browww…! Oh My! Thhheee…BONE!” it was the first time that she looked at me with that serious and shocking face expression. Then an ambulance came and a nurse came running and took me up the ambulance and told me to lie down on a bed. They were transferring me to a hospital. I unexpectedly had a forethought that this was going to be a disaster. Then the nurse started to clean my cut and after a while when we got to the emergency room which was behind the translucent curtains, a doctor was standing right next to a bed and was ready to seal my cut with a sharp u-shape needle. After I lay down, they put a white curtain on my face but showing only the place where I was cut. While they were sealing the cut I could feel the needle going through my eyebrow and I counted how many stitches there were: One…Two…Three…Four…!! But I couldn't felt any pain. During the surgery the old lady that I saw at school pop into my mind and I was trying to remember what she had said and the expression on her face. I was scared. after the surgery the doctor told my mother that I was very lucky, because if the cut was 1 centimeter longer, which is where the temple is located, I would have died the moment I hit my head. After the surgery my mother rewarded me with a drink that I loved during my childhood, It tasted sweet and surprisingly I felt something burning up my throat but the sweetness from the drink put out the flame and left the taste for a while. I was surprised. I shook my mother’s hand and told her “Mom!! The drink told me that I was being very brave during the surgery because I didn’t cry! It rewarded me with a implausible sweetness!” I was extremely happy. The next day when I got to school everyone was so worried and people were concerned about the accident. Some people were telling me what they saw and some were curious about how my cut looks like now. I could see my friends from far away running towards me and they shouted, “Ohhhhh! You are back! How was your surgery?” and I sighed softly then they said, “ The moment you fell on the ground we were so scared, we didn’t know what to do! Oh! And you know? When you stood up suddenly your blood was splashing onto our shirts! But good that you are safe.” Then Lily who got me into all this accident came and apologized for what she did but it was obvious that she wasn't sorry at all that you could see it on her face. Because of this accident my mother had to postponed the flight to The Philippines to next week. Now I have come through all the troubles, I learned that I should always be careful about what was in front and what was coming. I could still see the cut even though five years had passed. Whenever I saw the cut it always reminds me of the important things I have learned which were that I should make friends with everybody and not enemy because I do not want any more troubles and harms. This was what happened on my first surgery of my childhood.

Third Draft (peer editing)
It was on a clear Wednesday, I had badminton class right after lunch, it was my favorite class, and my friends and I were running and talking toward the gym that is about one meter away from the classroom. We talked and gossip about some teachers who we disliked, but mostly we talked about classmates who we hated. While we were running an unexpected thing happened, a girl who we disliked ran beside us and stuck her right foot out and tripped me. I was running at the very end, then of course I fell and I thought I had just it the ground and got some bruises but unfortunately, I hit right on the sharp edges of the rough stone stairs. Then I stood up unconsciously and stared downwards and saw my white shirt covered in blood and my shorts was covered by some blood and dust the worst was my shoes, before the accident it was pale white clean shoes but after the accident the color changed into a bloody red dusty color, then abruptly I started to see some stars and everything turned so bright that I couldn't see a thing. Suddenly I felt somebody holding my hand and was helping me to get up off the ground. The next thing I knew was that I was sitting in the school clinic with the nurse, who was trying to stop my head from bleeding. Then I saw my mom came rushing towards me when she saw my cut on my eyebrow she was shocked opening her mouth so wide and said, “ What happened? You..your..r...eye…ey..e….browww…! Oh My! Thhheee…BONE!” it was the first time that she looked at me with that serious face expression. Then an ambulance came and a nurse came running and brought me up the ambulance and told me to lie down on a bed. Then they started to clean my cut and after a while when we got to the emergency room a doctor was standing right next to a bed and was ready to seal my cut with a sharp u-shape needle. After I lay down they put a white curtain on my face but showing only the place where I was cut. While they were sealing the cut I could felt the needle going through my eyebrow but I couldn't felt any pain. The next day when I got to school everyone was so worried and people were concerned about the accident, some people were telling me what they saw and some were curious about how my cut looks like now. I could see my friends from far away running towards me and they shouted, “Ohhhhh! You are back! How was your surgery?” and I signed softly then they said, “ The moment you fell on the ground we were so scared, we didn’t know what to do! Oh! And you know? When you stood up suddenly your blood was splashing onto our shirts! But good that you are alright.”. Then the girls who got me into all this accident came and apologizing for what she did but it was obvious that she wasn't sorry at all that you could see it on her face. Now I have came through all the troubles I learned that I should always be careful about what was in front and what was coming. I also learned that I should make friends with everybody and not enemy because I do not want any more troubles. This was what happened on my first surgery of my ch

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Draft #2
It was on a clear sunny Wednesday. I had badminton class right after lunch. Physical Education was my favorite class during grade 4. My friends and I were running and talking toward the gym which is about one meter away from the middle school building. While we were walking an old lady came in front of us and smiled at us then she said something in a strange language that we have never heard of before but we didn't care. Then we started to talked and compare some teachers who we disliked with the teachers that we liked, but mostly we talked about classmates who we hated.

While we were running an unexpected thing happened, a girl who we disliked ran beside us and I could see evilness in her enormous rounded eyes and suddenly, she stuck her right foot out and tripped me. I was running at the very end, then of course I fell and I thought I just hit the ground and got some bruises but unfortunately, I hit right on the sharp edges of the rough stone stairs. I couldn't feel anything and there was a few seconds of complete darkness andd quiteness that hurts my eyes and my ears. I see people staring and some looked insane as if my blood were bursting out of my eye, but i could feel no pain. Then I stood up unconsciously and stared downwards and saw my white shirt covered in blood and my shorts was covered by some blood and dust, the worst was my shoes. Before the accident my shoes were pale white and clean but after the accident the color changed into a bloody red dusty color. Abruptly I started to see some stars and everything turned so bright that I couldn't see a thing. And something in my subconscious told me that I was dying.

Suddenly I felt somebody holding my hand and was helping me to get up off the ground. The next thing I knew was that I was sitting in the school clinic with the nurse, who was trying to stop my head from bleeding. Then I saw my mom came rushing towards me when she saw my cut on my eyebrow she was shocked opening her mouth so wide and said, “ What happened? You..your..r...eye…ey..e….browww…! Oh My! Thhheee…BONE!” it was the first time that she looked at me with that serious and shocking face expression.

Then an ambulance came and a nurse came running and took me up the ambulance and told me to lie down on a bed. They were transferring me to a hospital. I unexpectedly had a forethought that this was going to be a disaster. Then the nurse started to clean my cut and after a while when we got to the emergency room which was behind the translucent curtains, a doctor was standing right next to a bed and was ready to seal my cut with a sharp u-shape needle.

After I lay down, they put a white curtain on my face but showing only the place where I was cut. While they were sealing the cut I could felt the needle going through my eyebrow and i counted how many stitches were there but I couldn't felt any pain. During the surgery the old lady that I saw at school pop into my mind and I was trying to remembered what she had said and the expression on her face. I was scared. The doctor told my mother that I was very lucky, because if the cut was 1 centimeter longer which is where the temple is located and i would have died the moment i hit my head. After the surgery my mother rewarded me with a drink that i loved during my childhood, It tasted sweet and surprisingly i felt something burning up my throat but the sweetness from the drink put out the flame and left the taste for a while. I was surprisedh.

The next day when I got to school everyone was so worried and people were concerned about the accident. Some people were telling me what they saw and some were curious about how my cut looks like now. I could see my friends from far away running towards me and they shouted, “Ohhhhh! You are back! How was your surgery?” and I signed softly then they said, “ The moment you fell on the ground we were so scared, we didn’t know what to do! Oh! And you know? When you stood up suddenly your blood was splashing onto our shirts! But good that you are alright. And ”. Then the girls who got me into all this accident came and apologizing for what she did but it was obvious that she wasn't sorry at all that you could see it on her face. Because of this accident my mother had to postponed the flight to The Philippines to next week.

Now I have came through all the troubles I learned that I should always be careful about what was in front and what was coming. I could still see the cut eventhough five years had passed. Whenever I saw the cut it always reminds me of the important things I have learned from it was that I should make friends with everybody and not enemy because I do not want any more troubles and harms. This was what happened on my first surgery of my childhood.

Draft #1
Do you still remember then time of your first surgery? Well I do, and I still remember all the details about it even when and how did it happen. It was during my childhood in fourth grade. It was my first time being in the emergency room in a nearby hospital.

It was on a clear Wednesday, I had badminton class right after lunch, it was my favorite class, and my friends and I were running and talking toward the gym that is about one meter away from the classroom. We talked and gossip about some teachers who we disliked, but mostly we talked about classmates who we hated.

While we were running an unexpected thing happened, a girl who we disliked run beside us and stick her right foot out and tripped me, who was running at the very end, then of course I fell and I thought I had just it the ground and got some bruises but unfortunately, I hit right on the sharp edges of the rough stone stairs. Then I could felt my head was bleeding and my shirt was covered by blood and so was my shoes and shorts, then I started to see some stars and everything turned so bright that I couldn't see a thing.

Suddenly I felt somebody holding my hand and was helping me to get up off the ground. The next thing I knew was that I was sitting in the school clinic with the nurse, who was trying to stop my head from bleeding. Then I saw my mom came rushing towards me when she saw my cut on my eyebrow she was shocked she told me that she could see my bone through the deep cut.

Then an ambulance came and a nurse came running and brought me up the ambulance and told me to lie down on a bed. Then they started to clean my cut and after a while when we got to the emergency room a doctor was standing right next to a bed and was ready to seal my cut with a sharp u-shape needle. After I lay down they put a white curtain on my face but showing only the place where I was cut. While they were sealing the cut I could felt the needle going through my eyebrow but I couldn't felt any pain.

The next day when I got to school everyone was so worried and people were concerned about the accident, some people were telling me what they saw and some were curious about how my cut looks like now. My friends told me that my blood had splashed on their shirts and shorts but they were laughing at it. Then the girls who got me into all this accident came and apologizing for what she did but it was obvious that she wasn't sorry at all that you could see it on her face.

Now I have came through all the troubles I learned that I should always be careful about what was in front and what was coming. I also learned that I should make friends with everybody and not enemy because I do not want any more troubles. This was what happened on my first surgery of my childhood.